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Hiya, Youreit! I'm here to review your story! Here goes: There was a various assortment of beer, vodka, whiskey, and whatever vine the parents were stupid enough to leave on ...

Hiya there! Becca here! M'kay, I almost didn't read this becuase it's in on big clump. This will put most people off becuase when they see it, it's like a ...

Hiya Curly! I was crouching down into the cool sheets, still in my boxers and white T-shirt. The breeze from the porch blew in the room as I stared at ...

Hiya Cotton! I'm Becca! Interesting story you've got here, but first nitpicks! Nitpicks; Today was the last day of the working, five-day week – which meant that tonight was Friday ...

Hello Merlin, I'm Becca! I am here today to rip your work to shreds. *evil laugh* Kidding! But seriously... Nitpicks; The sun was descending towards evening and shining through his ...

Hi!! Nitpicks; Christmas Eve, and I sit shivering in the trenches, my body covered in frozen mud. Try: It was Christmas Eve... Explosions all around me near [nearly.] tear through ...

Heya! Okay, first thing: you have a really good idea here. I read the first chapter, and it was really good. Alrightie, let's get started: Nitpicks; I didn't have to ...

Hiya Daft Vader! I'm Becca, and here to critique your work! Let's get started! Nitpicks; Instead of its brother and sister planets in the Elexus system; Lexus and Harbourne, it ...

heyya hiya! Me again! Hey, I have a friend named Lydia! Lydia watched as the porcelain ballerina twirled gracefully around to the soft, tinkling music, never once breaking her faultless ...

Hi Alyssa! It's nice to see you. Even though I've never met you, It's still nice to see you! :D Anyways, I'm Becca or doodle, whichever you prefer. Int-er-esting start ...

Hello Evangelinne. First, you need to stay at a 2:1 ratio, meaning you need to post two reviews before you post something of your own. M'kay, now that we have ...

Hey Lexcy, I'm Becca or doodle, whichever you prefer. I would suggest not being so pushy. A simple "Please review, I'm desperate." Or something would be all needed. Then, if ...

Hello Diane, nice to see you again! Can't wait to get reading some more of your work! A light breeze picked up as I half ran down the stairs and ...

Hiya Keira! I'm Becca (or doodle)! Have you ever looked at the stars, looked at them and wondered, what, if anything was beyond them? You don't need to repeat 'looked.' ...

Hiya again! I think everybody else got mostly everything. Well, I love the story and the turn was unexpected. Also, with the whole ambulance thing. I'm a bit confused. Was ...